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One day on October 1958 the first video game was created by willaim highbotham. Tennis was the video game that was created. The game is named pong it is where to people play together. There is a controller and you move the little joystick on the controller and you get points to win. The the forest video game console was called Odyssey. The odyssey was released in September 1972 as the very first video game console. The system was developed by Ralph bear, Who created ping pong a style game play that the odyssey offered.
Wow. Nice job. I never knew that. :O
ReplyDeleteWow nice job Kieren and I did not know that the first game was made by willaim highbotham that was fascinating Bye!
ReplyDeleteNice writing Kieren. Its cool to see the evolution of video games, and how far we've come.
ReplyDeleteNice job kieren i did not know that.
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