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Kia ora Kieren! What a cool and a little bit scary mini beast you have created, it sounded very cute when you described it so well in your writing. Then as I read on I realised he was pretty tough! It sounds like he wanted to protect the school so he could have all the naughty kids to eat! remember when you are changing to a new day or time in your story is when we make a new paragraph. You are growing your writing every week, excellent effort. Also, reread it and listen to where you would put a full stop not a comma. Thank you Kieren, another week of excellent sharing during our Meets.
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Kia ora Kieren! What a cool and a little bit scary mini beast you have created, it sounded very cute when you described it so well in your writing. Then as I read on I realised he was pretty tough! It sounds like he wanted to protect the school so he could have all the naughty kids to eat! remember when you are changing to a new day or time in your story is when we make a new paragraph. You are growing your writing every week, excellent effort. Also, reread it and listen to where you would put a full stop not a comma. Thank you Kieren, another week of excellent sharing during our Meets.
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